How could I and what have I done,
I grabbed her hair and pulled her head to the gun,
quickly the color in her beautiful eyes faded,
and large wet tears down her face, cascaded,
Her body slowly fell down to the floor,
as blood stains of betrayal covered the door,
I killed the women I loved yet hated so much,
but how much i now long for her touch,
so I will add my blood to hers,
i'll be with her soon and get what I deserve,
the tears for her fall down my face,
look at me all I'm just a discrace.













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I grabbed her hair and pulled her head to the gun,
quickly the color in her beautiful eyes faded,
and large wet tears down her face they cascaded,
Her body slowly fell down to the floor,
as blood stains of betrayal covered the door,
I killed the women I loved yet hated so much,
but how much i now long for her touch,
so now i may add my blood to hers,
go to her now and get what I deserve,
Now the tears for her fall down my face,
look at me all Iam is a discrace.
First off ... im faving this..
2nd ...some corrections...
1st and 2nd lines are perfect.
4th line..."and large wet tears down her face, cascaded" ... take out "they"
5th and 6th lines are perfect
7th and 8th are perfect
9th and 10th are perfect
12 line... "look at me, all i am is a discrace." ...throw in a comma.
yu get FAV.
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